BEAT
heartbeat
importance
life
afterlife
born with one
some of us at least
that beat
a loving whisper on a winter night
that beat
an elusive smile you finally catch
running
across your child’s face
that beat
it drives us
the rest of us
that beat
we’re addicted
that beat
on the streets-
basketballs, Niagara falls-
beats
not heartbeats
beats
to drive them
to drive us
you
have nothing
those whispers
nonexistent
summer heat
cold
remembrance
love
desired
addicted
to stopping that beat
that golden pedestal which your dreams stand
not waiting for you
never was
spot you wanted
gone
given away to someone remembered
someone loved
someone with a beat.
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Meaning of My Poem
So, if you didn’t get it from the poem, it was supposed to be about what things drive people. Kind of like good people are driven towards, for a loss of words, the pursuit of happiness. While bad people (like Adolf Hitler) are driven by their egos, and only want to be remembered, or loved. The theme of “beat” is as if we all have a beat, but some of them beat for the wrong reasons, or lack a beat in general. The term “beat” is supposed to represent feelings, or a heartbeat, or just something that keeps you going (ex. The beat of a basketball, the endless momentum of a waterfall). Although some people are addicted to, rather than striving for happiness, stopping those beats (a.k.a. killing, etc.). But in the end, it isn’t those who strive to be remembered or loved who end up be remembered and loved, it’s those who do their own thing. Those who do what’s right for not their pursuit of happiness, but everyone else’s’.
So I want you to be SO FREAKING critical with this I'll end up crying. I know it's sort of cheesy and whatever but I wanted it to be like, all angsty and stuff.
So, if you didn’t get it from the poem, it was supposed to be about what things drive people. Kind of like good people are driven towards, for a loss of words, the pursuit of happiness. While bad people (like Adolf Hitler) are driven by their egos, and only want to be remembered, or loved. The theme of “beat” is as if we all have a beat, but some of them beat for the wrong reasons, or lack a beat in general. The term “beat” is supposed to represent feelings, or a heartbeat, or just something that keeps you going (ex. The beat of a basketball, the endless momentum of a waterfall). Although some people are addicted to, rather than striving for happiness, stopping those beats (a.k.a. killing, etc.). But in the end, it isn’t those who strive to be remembered or loved who end up be remembered and loved, it’s those who do their own thing. Those who do what’s right for not their pursuit of happiness, but everyone else’s’.
So I want you to be SO FREAKING critical with this I'll end up crying. I know it's sort of cheesy and whatever but I wanted it to be like, all angsty and stuff.
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The whole 'beat' theme is great and everything but I'm feeling like you're not digging down deep enough. You're giving me great detail but not in the right way, like it needs to. It's actually kind of frustrating to read because some parts like
"an elusive smile you finally catch running across your child’s face that beat
it drives us the rest of us that beat we’re addicted"
I mean if 'beat' is your feelings and everything you kind of have to be addicted to it. Whether you like it or not your feeling are there and you might not show them on your face or express them verbally but they're there. Even those who don't like 'beat's and want to stop them, are addicted to them because they can't help it- we all have feelings. So basically what I'm saying is that you're contridicting yourself. "that beat it drives the REST of us"
Your feelings drive everyone. Feeling drive evil people to try to destroy feelings.
And about the whole basketballs and Niagra falls thing, you're coping out details like a weak kneed hoochy coochy nancy boy.
I really don't think these are good examples. Not even the majority of the state is driven to accomplish their goals by basketballs or Niagra falls. And yes while basket balls are fun and Niagra falls is a nice place to visit besides the occasional odd stunt man and a NBA ghetto hoop star these things hold no importance to the average human being.
Also, trying to be as a non-bitch as I can about this but the ending...it's good but it somehow feels incomplete.
Because as I stated everyone has a beat reguardless of what their morals are.
And evil people are also loved (to make a point out of the top of my head, Satan has worshippers XD) so the ending is kind of vague like anyone who could have made like one mistake in their life and their dreams could be given away to someone who doesn't neccessarily deserve them, such is life.
Life, as you know, is not fair.
And I'm feeling this poem is kind of like a believable dream world. Where things that are unfair happen but are soon easily repaired because the evil get what they deserve which doesn't happen a lot in the big picture.
we have that beat!!!
lets keep it alive!!!
you are so talent!!!!
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i know im only waiting..........i hope so...
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